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Codename: Wanderlust ([personal profile] codenamewanderlust) wrote2018-12-08 12:09 pm

LJIdol / LPF: Week 8: Sprezzatura

She’s back of the bus crazy
Working through a bag of candy
 
The sights and sounds of the world 
are nothing compared to the inside of her head
 
She’s
Tent city, under the bridge 
Smoking reefer on street corners
Back of the bus crazy
 
Bumming two cigarettes simultaneously
With practiced precision
One over her left ear, one to her lips, 
Tilting her head to accept the offered flame 
 
She’s 
living la vie boheme 
If effort is graceless
She’s 
a prima-ballerina 
Swaying to that beat
Electric Kool-Aid Acid Test
Lucid dreaming on LSD
 
Rings on every finger
Ash and ink stained fingertips
Painted purple fingernails
 
She’s 
Motels and No-Tell’s
Midnight neon lights
 
Laying pull-can-tabs in the hollows of her hip bones 
Keeping her secrets in the glass beads braided into her hair
Batting her lashes behind thick glasses
 
She’s
Back pocket sci-fi paperbacks
Using blades of grass as bookmarks
Effortlessly cool
As crazy as they come
 
Conjuring safety-pins 
from the bottoms 
of her pockets and draw string bags
Preaching the benefits of drinking 
Hot water and turmeric 
 
She’s
Making wishes on dandelion pods
Lavender sunrise chilly mornings
Drowning in saffron cardigan

Singing all the words
To songs you've never heard
Hearing the voice of god between verses
 
She’s
Philosophy at the bus stop 
Sucking on gummy-bears and lolly-pops
Hot pink chalk graffiti 
She was here…
 
She’s 
Fundamentally free
And fulling her fiber art fantasies
Conversing with the cats
That congregate at her ankles
 
Wearing flowers in the buttonhole 
Of her patchwork pea-coat
Trailing the scent of Patchouli
 
She’s 
Psilocybin mellow, under the street-lamps
Reading the tarot in parking lots
Back of the bus crazy

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[personal profile] static_abyss 2018-12-09 03:48 pm (UTC)(link)
I like the rhythm of your poem. It gives it this unique beat that sounds almost like a song when I read it.
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[personal profile] bleodswean 2018-12-09 03:55 pm (UTC)(link)
oh, WOWOWOWWOW!!!

This is a rollicking, accomplished, charming and tragic, character portrait. FANTASTICALLY well done. Brava!
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[personal profile] bsgsix 2018-12-10 07:48 pm (UTC)(link)
This is such a rhythmic portrait. I was THERE with this piece. Thank you for that - for writing something that can transport a reader. VERY excellent.
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[personal profile] sonreir 2018-12-11 01:40 am (UTC)(link)
I like the imagery in this! I think I know someone who matches this description... :)
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[personal profile] dmousey 2018-12-11 03:03 am (UTC)(link)
I REALLY LOVED this!! This talked to the old hippie inside! LOL
Thanks for inking this! 😊🐭🐀✌💚
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[personal profile] tonithegreat 2018-12-11 12:14 pm (UTC)(link)
What a fun picture you draw here! Surely not a life of all laughs and ease, but sunshiney nonetheless. I enjoyed this piece very much.
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[personal profile] the_eternal_overthinker 2018-12-11 01:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Even I loved the imagery you created here. It was a fun ride along with your protagonist and yet you know its not a bed of roses. Good work with the prompt!
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[personal profile] rayaso 2018-12-11 03:07 pm (UTC)(link)
I enjoyed this. It was a great poetic description, and bring the end of the poem back to the beginning worked well. Very good work!
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[personal profile] murielle 2018-12-11 04:13 pm (UTC)(link)
BRAVA!!!!

This is amazing! Wonderful! I love every line, from the first to the last. Brilliant!

I've been deep-down smiling since that first line.

BRAVA! BRAVA!
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[personal profile] adoptedwriter 2018-12-12 12:22 am (UTC)(link)
I love this! Old hippies! Yay! Bet my birth mother was something like this.
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[personal profile] halfshellvenus 2018-12-12 07:59 am (UTC)(link)
I like the bohemian, free-spirit archetype here, someone who lives and enjoys life fully and without self-criticism. It's very freeing.

[personal profile] bellatrixe 2018-12-12 10:27 pm (UTC)(link)
I agree this has a really melodious flow! Loved it :D
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[personal profile] alycewilson 2018-12-13 01:16 am (UTC)(link)
Great poem!